Hello!
I've read your work. I must say, your company must be very pleased to have such a hardworking personnel around. You've done a great job!
One comment, however, the manuscript is too narrative. Don't get me wrong on this one. What I would like to insinuate is, putting myself on the shoes of the ordinary worker in the company, I would find it too tiring to read. If, on the other hand, a supervisory level position will review, it will take time from his very busy schedule to read through and understand some terminologies which are not common considering the nature of his job.
Another comment is about the entire piece containing topics which are not so much of regular employee concern but more of the HR's. You can limit it by being precise on things directly involving the employee and his job and summarizing the rest in one short, concise unit of the "manual".
But, as I said, it will be very useful on the corporate side as basis for employee orientation.
Please, don't get me wrong.., I just want to be transparent knowing that you are looking for an honest opinion to assist you with.
GOD Bless!!!